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Japan Relief April 7, 2011

Filed under: News Analysis — jlestino11 @ 8:01 pm

“Aloha for Japan” relief shirt

There was an earthquake that occurred in Japan on March 10, 2011. The earthquake. It struck in the northeast of Tokyo with an 8.9 magnitude. There were 350 casualties and 500 people went missing. This quake was the fifth largest in the world since 1900. It was caused when the Pacific tectonic plate was under the North American plate that moved Eastern Japan towards North America by 13 feet.

A few hours after the earthquake, Hawaii’s Department of Emergency Management issued a tsunami warning. The sirens began at 9:59 p.m. on Thursday night and were sounding every hour starting at 11:15 p.m.

The natural disaster in Japan was tragic. They are dealing with a crisis and need help. All over the world different countries and organizations have been offering help to Japan in this time of need.

American Red Cross is taking donations through the web and text messages. Save the Children has a goal of raising $5 million for the long-term recovery for children affected. AmeriCares in Japan is working to deliver medicines and supplies to hospitals, shelters, and health responders for survivors.

Retail stores have worked closely with the Lt. Governor of Hawaii. Proceeds from the sale of the specially made “Aloha” relief-effort shirts have gone directly to the Japan recovery campaign. They have been sold all over the islands and still are being printed due to high demand. The Aloha for Japan shirts are white t-shirts with the word Aloha printed with the red dot from the Japanese flag representing the “O” in Aloha. On the back of the shirt is printed “The world will turn to Hawai’i as they search for world peace because Hawai’i has the key… and that key is Aloha!” –Auntie Pilahi Paki.”

In Hawaii we have had many Japan relief events.Here at the Academy, the class of 2011’s Senior Showcase on March 19 collected money for admissions and sold baked goods. On Tuesday, March 29, all students were permitted to wear red shirts and Japan relief shirts with jeans and donate money to Japan.

There is still a lot being done to help Japan as they recover from this tragedy. The donations made are being used to rebuild and restore Japan.

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One Response to “Japan Relief”

  1. molyneux111 Says:

    Julie – a few editing suggestions:

    1. You need a period at the end of the first sentence.

    2. Clarify “It was caused when the Pacific tectonic plate WAS under the North American plate THAT shifted Eastern Japan towards North America by 13 feet.” (consider changing to MOVED & AND)

    3. “The natural disaster in Japan was DRASTIC.” (strange wording – consider TRAGIC)

    4. Clarify “American Red Cross is taking donations from their website as well as text messages.” (Use parallel construction like: “taking donations THROUGH the web AND text messages.”)

    5. “Save the Children has a goal of (add RAISING here) $5 million TO (change to FOR) the long-term recovery for children affected.”

    6. “Shirts have be made and sold. All the profits made from these special shirts sold all go to Japan.” (repetitious -try combining – i.e. Proceeds from the sale of specially made “Aloha” relief-effort shirts have gone directly to the Japan recovery campaign.)

    7. “SUCH AS (delete) here at the Academy, the class of 20111’s (correct year) Senior Showcase on March 19 collected money for admissions and baked goods were sold.” (see comments in sentence. Parellellism: change ending to “collected money for admissions and sold baked goods.)

    8.”Proceeds for this event were donated to Japan.” (this sentence is unnecessary – already stated.)

    9. “On Tuesday, March 29, all students were permitted to wear red shirts and Japan relief shirts with jeans and donations were being taken.” (again, paralellism – try “permitted to wear…and donate (similar verb structure))

    There is still a lot being done to help Japan as they recover from this tragedy. (strange ending. Try to wrap this up – perhaps sentence about how this support is actually helping Japan?)

    Please edit & update.


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